Resolve of a Reject

by Mr Universe   Oct 2, 2012


Beaten, bloodied, and bruised, we are your rejects.
You see not faces, but mirrors of own defects.
We will weather your wrath, not wither, waste, or wane.
Our endeavour eternal. I am not my pain.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Lemon

    This is amazing! I love the rhyme (rhyming isn't my strong point, so I like it all the more when other people do it well!). Very blunt, cutting, I like the power and emotion behind it. The length works really well. You definitely have a lot of talent!

  • 12 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    I did like this piece nice length and straight to
    The point

    I preferred this piece more at the beginning
    I thought it seemed more powerful

    This is just my opinion tho :)

    Well done dude

  • 12 years ago

    by MyHalozChokinMe

    I think you conveyed a hell of a lot in this short piece.

    The line "I am not my pain" is what keeps resonating in my head, each time I read this.

    Powerful, indeed.

  • 12 years ago

    by Alanis

    I like this. Short but cuts right to the point.

    We will not wither, waste, or wane.
    Endeavor eternal. I am not my pain.

    Those are the lines I love the most.

    Just check Endeavor is spelt endeavour
    Other than that an amazing piece
    You have talent and with prosper
    Immensely on this website.
    Keep writing, looking forward to
    More of your works

    • 12 years ago

      by Mr Universe

      Thanks for the read. I've edited it since. It flows easier and I fleshed the emotion out a bit.
      I try to convey as much as I can in as few words possible.
      Glad you enjoyed it.

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