Comments : Contraception

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    This was a very harsh comparison but that's what made it work so very well. Very good images were presented in this short verse and I think that's what also made it work...hits hard at the reader and it made me draw my breathe in...

    We needed constancy
    so when you placed a disfigured
    dream in our arms and said it
    was ours, We gladly
    took it.

    ^^^^

    Kick in the guts here....imagining a family being handed a child that wasn't normal and telling them it was theirs....what a comparison Nor....Loved the whole piece!

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    You have always been such a beast when it came to endings. Lord

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    The structure, love the message, love the ending, loved every dang thing about this poem. You made the perfect metaphor of this and twisted it to fit within the realm of your existence. I originally read constancy as "consistency" the first quick skim through, and now that I've been able to take the time with this poem, I love that it wasn't consistency. I mean, you need that, too, but you need love, hope, aspirations that take root and hold strong, something to believe in, rather than false hope and fake people/movements.

    Ah. I love this.

  • 12 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    A very well crafted poetic statement of how difficult it was to uproot the evil of autocracy and replace it with the roots of democracy, still taking its roots in the early Arab spring.

    Well said, and I would not be surprised if it makes the winning list this week.

    Will try to add more later.