Comments : It's Time To Start

  • 12 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Simple but constructive! Really it's time to start. The most difficult is to start and with what to start, especially after a long pause or laziness.
    Too many months passing by
    Not enough of of me writing

    Just remove one 'of'

    I've slowly forgotten talents
    That I've hidden from too many

    Vard to be back with the same talents unless you have something new.

    It's time for me to keep it going
    Time for pen to dance on paper
    And let all my thoughts flood

    I like the expression of 'dance' related to the pen on the paper, so strong.

    And fill every single empty paper
    It's time to dream big
    And make my worries small

    Nice relation of big dreams with small worries.

    It's finally to start again

    This is somehow confusing, maybe you mean 'It's finally time to start again' or some other idea.

    I enjoyed reading your work. Good job.

  • 12 years ago

    by that Dude

    Dream big Ashley
    I like it

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    "Time for pen to dance on paper" - excellent.
    A great little piece with a great flow.
    All the very best,
    Ben