What a beautiful poem. So thoughtfully written, care is taken in each sentence to ensure it flows. Well done. keep writing

Oh my goodness Peter..you have outdone yourself..

What a beautiful, beautiful Love poem. It had me in tears as I read it..one could only hope to find a man as loving as you!

I loved every syllable of it, the best and most touching poem I ever read:)

And when at last, I lay my head,
and breath my last on my death bed
I'll turn to her with tear in eye,
I'll hold her hand, give one last sigh
And say these words that's so, so true,
'My darling girl, I so love you..'

^^
This part reminds me of a picture I had as my avatar for a long time, one of two skeletons in eternal embrace:)

Well done, PP

5/5 Ingrid

Peter, this one is stellar. I wish I had a vote left.

Beautiful words for your love. I am sure She is/would be honored by this.

U r a gud writter i like this nice poem

Almost perfect Mr purple pant wearing gnome,

As usual you have chosen to rhyme, but....

In the first 5 stanzas the rhyming scheme is 1st and 3rd line rhyming, but in stanza 6 you have gone off track slightly with 'life'
and 'want'
then in 7 you have reverted to aa,bb, rhyming scheme.
Then the final final stanza every line rhymes.
IMO I would have kept to 1 type. Also
you start 7 with 'when at last' which suggests the end of the poem, yet you carried on for another stanza. I would have ended it here.

Stanza 2 line 6 needs a comma after 'stop' this helps you stop at this stage which empthasises your point.

Overall the flow was good,
I like the imagery in stanza 1 bringing the seasons into the poem and the emotion throughout is good.

All of this is my opinion it is your poem so you can tell me to bugger off if you want, or PM me if you want to give me more abuse. (Knowing you, you will choose that option)

So very beautiful... I adore this from line one... It depicts true beauty of love and the emotions seem so soft and tender here... Beautiful to the word:)

This two pharagraphs are my favorite

"When I was at my lowest ebb,
and all around me was despair
With hands always around my head,
and I so wished 'I wasn't there..'"

"If she could ever, ever be,
The Love, the one, that's mean't for me
I search no more, 'eternity,
my Life, my Love's, in front of me!

I look no further.....it is she...."

They blew me away, your whole poem is sooo inspiration, I love your flwo as you write, it really pulls me into the poem and the emotion boucning around perfectly, I LOVE THE WAY YOU WRITE! Never stop, or I will hunt you down, jk lol

SHE IS SSSOOOOOOOO LUCKY

Oh peter! Hw I love this! Ur talent surpasses anything I could ever right! I reli like this

Li

Wonderful poem Peter!!
why haven't u submitted any poems lately??

This was a beautiful piece Peter, you choose your words so delicately and perfectly that flows with each stanza.

I simply love it, my favourite part was:

If she could ever, ever be,
The Love, the one, that's mean't for me
I search no more, 'eternity,
my Life, my Love's, in front of me!

I look no further.....it is she....

Simply beautiful, keep writing Peter you are amazing

WONDERFUL!!!

The conclusion you wrote was the perfect ending! Emotional and moving. And good job for making a classic style love poem original. That's hard to do anymore :)

Ah, Peter, you never let me down when I'm in need of a wonderful love poem with smooth as glass rhyme. Brilliant!
All the best
Ben