The Monster, The Demon, The Puppet You Created...

Wow, i love this poem :P like everything about it was wow, yeah i really loved that halo to horn ish, i taught it was pretty cool :) great job.

The stanza that had the most impact on me, as the reader, was :
"Who are you?
To take the angelic boy,
And turn his halo into horns..."

I can appreciate the sense of rage and frustration in this piece.

What happened to me?
I used to be good,
But now I crave all this blood..

Sorta like good girl gone bad. Great
Start and kept me reading

Where did this hunger come from?
This taste for flesh,
And thirst for death...

A monster you never though you would become.
A great way to describe it

What am I becoming?
I was once human,
But now I'm a monster covered in blood..

This fits in and is very similar to the previous paragraph

Who are you?
To take the angelic boy,
And turn his halo into horn...

A two faced boy who will tell you exactly what you
Want to hear but only for a short while. I very well thought
Paragraph.

What caused you to do this?
I once was strong,
But now I'm nothing more than a puppet...

Cracked under pressures after to long resisting.
Puppet is the perfect way to describe such an instance

YOU DID THIS TO ME!
YOU CREATED THIS MONSTER!
YOU TURNED MY LOVE TO HATE!
and now all I crave is blood..

I think you use the word blood and crave a bit too
Much in this poem. This part you made it clear that you
Hate him and thirst for his death.

I DON'T WANT THIS LIFE!
I DON'T LIKE TO KILL!
I WON'T LET YOU CONTROL ME!
even if I like the taste of flesh...

I like how you made the caps fit. This tells me that you
With prevent yourself from turning into a replica of him.

WE COULD HAVE BEEN MORE!
WE SHOULD HAVE STAY WHOLE!
WE WOULD HAVE BEEN PERFECT!
but now I love being covered in blood...

Blood is a bit brought up a bit much or just
Needed to be expressed through a different work lik
Crimson liquid.

THEY CALLED ME STUPID!
THEY SAID I WAS A FOOL!
THEY TOLD ME TO STOP LOVING YOU!
now I can't see a way for my horns to become a halo..

I like this. Its mostly like this with relationships

SHE MADE ME FEEL,
SHE BROUGHT ME TO LIFE,
SHE FIXED WHAT YOU BROKE,
but in the end all she did was take the strings away from you...

Perfect way to end this poem.