Edward- I read this piece yesterday, but now I have time to comment... I have to tell you this piece was brilliant... "Burning" candles as a metaphor for a woman who is dying perhaps? I adore candles and have used them a few times as metaphors and I have to say you did an elegant job with this piece... there are a few grammar issues I would like to address, to help you shape this piece up if I may...

Second Stanza: witness = witnesses

"pain her"= try "Pain in her"

"As the world would lit another
burning candles..." -----------> try this

As the world lights another burning candle..

Just a few things I noticed and thought I would mention, hope I was of some help... I really love this piece!! very nice!

This was really well written, I liked the metaphor use of the candle burning and I suppose your use of this could be read in many different ways, it could actually mean so many different things depending on how you look at things.

It holds a lot of depression, and I imagine it as more of a lost soul who has been so badly damaged she feels so invisible like she is just slowly fading away or burning away from everything that she knows, the burning representing the pain she has been though and is suffering with inside.

I agree with maple, I would change the last word from plural to single... "burning candle" which would end the poem correctly.

Awesome job on this one though, very powerful.