by Lune de ma vie
This is bone chilling. Spooky and interesting in the aspect how you gave expressive emotions and thoughts of the women and man, shows what a twisted mind can think and feel. Strong write and really chilling as I said. |
by LostWords
Holy shit. I like the 1st person narrative approach. It leaves the reader unsettled and scared. |
by Alanis
Wow, now this is a dark poem, written to perfection |
by Mr. Darcy
I like the dark sinister tones in this. The absolute control of the dominant, knife wielding protagonist is powerful. The submissive pleas create a scene that this reader found palpable. The fact you left it midpoint allows for the reader to use their imagination - and we all know how vivid they can be. |