by Hellon
It's nice to see you post once more and although I don't fulled get your meaning there are certain aspects of this poem that stand out to me but first... |
Good poem man, I enjoyed it reminds me of some of my life. |
by L
This is sad because she was the one that brought meaning to your life it seems, she was the one that could see through your eyes. The eyes are the gate to our soul so she saw through your soul and became something more. |
by Lady Nik
You've still got it. Now use it some more. -Nik |
I'm sighing right now... this makes my heart wrench. |
by The Queen
I think what I really like about this piece is its easy yet constant flow. You might not be aware, which I highly doubt, but I think the meter of this piece is nearly perfect. |
by WintersAngel
Wow. Very sad indeed. Very nice flow though. |
by Beautiful Soul
This one does break your heart. Though at the first stanza there is a tiny bit of hope. I love how you describe the hug as something so magical that it can heal a hurt heart. The wording is perfect to show the two sides love can hold. The character who is sad you show vividly that sadness even held by love kills you. The way the story enfolds she is trying to get you to open up and the wording it seems like you don't know how to express your true feelings. The last lines are extremely powerful and proves that the past can be very overwhelming. Overall beautiful poem! |