Black desert

Your poems depict pain and pessimism yet they accept the reality.... Good piece and keep writing:)

Your poems depict pain and pessimism yet they accept the reality.... Good piece and keep writing:)

Alone with my candle light
watching the moon through my window

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This is such a beautiful opening. Amazing imagery that gives the reader such a feeling of tranquility. Utterly beautiful in its simplicity.

Slowly my foot steps
went through my memories
There is so many colorful days

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Footsteps through memories what a clever way to put it. Truly thoughtful in your word choice and arrangement here. One minor thing... 'is' in the third line should be 'are' for you are speaking of days (plural).

But my clock not allowed me
to stay there
fate pushed me deep in this hell

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Unfortunately the first line is awkwardly worded. I think it should read:
'But my clock did not allow me..'
Another suggestion which feel free to ignore as it is your poem, I think the last line would read better if read like:
"fate pushed me deeper into this hell"
It's a minor alteration and completely up to you.

Now it seems I'm living in a black desert
Darkness is everywhere
I have to hardly breath my pain

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I love the idea of the black desert - it's quite unique and rather intriguing.
I know what you are trying to say in the third line, but 'hardly' doesn't work where it is. Consider revising or removing the word completely may be easiest though the meaning will shift slightly. I'll leave it to you.

That's all because i used to believe nothing
but your unhealthy promises

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Nothing to fix but a minor typo here -- capitalise the 'i' in the first line. I haven't heard the expression 'unhealthy promises' but I like it, I think it is unique to you.

Hurt a lot, my feelings are burning up under that candle light
But without you I'm slowly missing the meaning for life

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That second line is WOW! And the raw emotion is pouring through your words right at this moment. Incredible!

My mistakes seemed always beautiful
Almost 700 days, waiting for your next hello
Now, I'm looking forward to keeping these mistakes forever

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This is combination of beautiful and sorrow. Obvious dedication for you to wait 700 days for someone which is well worth a commendation (if it is indeed true). I like the idea that mistakes can be beautiful. I've never thought about it really, but I suppose to some degree you could be right. An absolutely amazing ending.

Overall,
Nice use of imagery, emotion really hit hard towards the end which was well worth the wait. Apart from a few minor grammatical errors which can be excused as this is your second language after all, this poem is truly splendid. (:

Five/five

Nicely penned!

5/5!

Practically perfect in every way. 5/5