Comments : Any girls pimp

  • 12 years ago

    by Darren

    Two nit first of all

    line 5 should be 'you're' plus all the 'i' should be 'I'

    apart from that.....

    The pace in this was electric, the rhyme scheme helped hugely, but what makes this piece is the pure raw emotion, there is real hatred all the way through.

    good write

    • 12 years ago

      by nightmaRs chaOs

      Thank you but the only reason why my i's are not capitalized is the fact that i was too lazy to do it lol