Shoreline

This piece makes me think of a woman yearning to sail, to be at peace with someone, or to be with someone, its heart breaking... I can feel the beauty and yearning within this metaphoric piece... and its just beautiful... in the ending, I can visualize her standing by the shoreline... this piece is very emotional and it takes me to memories of my own... very nice!

Your beautiful words, echo that of an ending relationship. I loved how you used a pendulum, as a simile for good and bad times. It's heart breaking, we try so hard to maintain stability...happiness giving it our all...and then reality hits like a crashing wave.

There's but one thing though.

"while i,
like an edgy wave,
am trap to this ever gloomy

shorline"
^^ I think trap, should be trapped.

And as always Queen, a beautiful write.

This is beautiful. I feel like I can relate to it in a strange way.

The clocks you speak of, the beats and moments of time feel like a very deep metaphor, it's mesmerizing.

As I read I could picture you outside, moon shedding a brief light behind you and the calm waves brushing up against the shore. I have no idea what you were doing or even if that what's you wanted to portray but it's a lovely thought.

5/5 (: