Brilliant, as its simplicity having the free verse style. I can say that you describe him all in the title of the poem which is so deep as a drying rose. I think you can say 'a drying rose' than 'a dried rose' and it's up to you. I really enjoyed reading your poem.
5/5

Gud one..
I loved d title.

This is incredibly sad, and probably true for some old men and women out there whose family has taken advamtage of their hard work and pays little attention to them now that they are old and retired. That makes me sad....Reminds me to always keep loving on my parents and granny, appreciate every day with them, and all their hard work. Thank you for writing this beautiful piece. I enjoyed it.

Amreen this is really good and really touching, the last stanza is really sad and so poignant.

great write

This is so sad, reminds me of an old man sitting in the nursing home with his family only visiting on holidays...and when they do, they all chat with each other instead of actually trying to talk to him and be there for him. It happens so often... so heartbreaking. :(

This so brilliantly executed. Your detailing is done beautifully considering the scenario the subject is in. A deep message you pondered about. Its very unfortunate that parents and grannies hard work, love and time doesn't pay off in their older years. When they need to enjoy the fruits of their labour. They're least taken into consideration as they sacrificed their time and energy to ensure we got the best of our needs met. Nowadays 'old peoples home' is their bus stop. After years of driving on the road just to please us.

All they need is our time, care and affection but we choose to keep them far from our comfort zone. How despicable of us to compensate them selfishly. No amount of comfort provided in foreign care and environments can fill up the gap that yearns for the presence of their children and grand-kids. We need to set our priorities right and assure we give our parents the best of us in their aging years.

A very thought provoking piece. Written straight from the heart. Kudos! dear, much love. Blessings :-) ..

Now that's original. I like such topics. They move me. It's so sad to become old and gray. I have this phobia of Alzheimer because it runs in our family from my father's side. Here, it's different, yet still about being old and overlooked; you can't do anything. And whatever you did in the past is just forgotten...

Lovely showcasing.
I think it should be 'aging' in the end?

Incredibly heart-breaking. Just goes to show you, how loosely people use the word family. No one should should ever feel this, especially when they've worked so hard to provide. Truly thought provoking, and well penned.

This is really very sad poem...n thanks for such a meaningful n beautiful description!

Well done dear!

Sad poem. This really made me think of how it would be like to be an old man who was forgotton by his friends and family.

Wow, this poem is sad but touching. I can understand how someone who worked their whole life to support a family can now feel looked over. My grandmother did before she died. No one should ever feel that way

The title: WOW! I think this is a beautiful title that speaks volumes by itself. It really drew me in.

He sits on his rocking chair
tallying accounts,
reading newspaper,
gazing at the sky sometimes
as he passes his retirement days.

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The imagery of this stanza is outstanding. Everything is vividly envisioned. One thing I will suggest is that in the line about the newspaper to either add 'the' before 'newspaper' or add an 's' onto newspaper as it seems to read slightly awkwardly. (as does my last statement, lol) But yes, this is a simple, beautiful and emotive opening stanza. Very well done.

The visit of relatives
brings a smile on his face
though he isnt looked upon
his words fall on deaf ears,
his presence often unnoticed.

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This increases the level of sorrow: his beloved family takes the time to see him, but it's almost pointless because they care, they don't want to be there, they've already removed him from their lives and now they're just waiting for the inevitable. Again flawless imagery - when I first read those first two lines it made me smile because I could see and almost feel the sheer joy he was said to be feeling at seeing his family - an innocent and easy happiness - but then I read the following lines and the warmth of joy just seeped from my bones. You have a way with words to create emotion and take it away and/or alter it instantly.

He possess the best of guidance
but revolted upon often,
His weak vision-
strong enough to
hide his love for care.

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I think 'possess' should be plural - it reads awkwardly and I feel this word is the issue. Not sure though. I love the word choice and arrangement here - it continues the sadness in the reader whilst also providing exposition which appears to be necessary for this piece.

His smiles are captured in solitude,
the sense of his tender skin-
often missed,
he wishes for a touch of care-
often overlooked.

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I feel with the line: 'he wishes for a touch of care' you are merely repeating yourself from the previous stanza but in a different arrangement of words. I'm not sure whether this was intentional or unrealised..? Let's say it was intentional - obviously this aspect of the old man's life is important and as you said 'overlooked' - there is great significance here, like due to this lack of care, more sorrow will only come as in his days being numbered perhaps? Or perhaps simply that because of this lack of care, his last days were horrible for him.

He remembers his days of hard work,
his dedication for his small family
which no one remembers,
everyone just forgot him;
just like his aging years.

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This is a sad reality isn't it. For all our lives we work hard, then we retire, but our families are just beginning to thrive themselves, to have their own lives and families and in the process forget about the old man that cared for his children.
I like the last line, though I'm not entirely able to understand it. My brain isn't working well this morning, haha. I feel it is something simple yet with such significance. Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think it is that he died younger than he was meant to because of the aforementioned lack of care and love from his family and therefore it was almost like the last years of his life were forgotten because they were erased..? I don't know.

Overall, I absolutely adore this piece.

Five/Five

Wow! I love how raw the imagery is; you really made me see this man and care deeply about him in just 5 stanzas!

WOW!!!! i stand corrected i am NOT a good poet after reading this!!!! the title didn't really give me a hint of this but it should've! dang this poem made me want to cry and i don't cry normally and unfortunalty people that give the better part of their lives for their families often are those like these in this poem but not if he has people love him this poem is just awesome and no one will take it away the greatness in this poem! :) 5/5

Queen Ash

This really captures the dismal plight of aging. It almost gives a shiver of anxiety about aging, so it must be well-written! 5/5

What I got from it is you spend your life then you grow old and watch the world deteriorate . He misses the past and his youth. maybe im totally wrong. but thats what i got from it . i like it , putting yourself in someone elses shoes.