Like the sentiment in this, nice atmosphere created with so few words.

But I am thinking that the final line contains 6 syllables instead of 5

was this what you intended?

Much better!!!

now 5,7,5

great write

I like the message you share here... Has so much to showcase through few words..
Wonderful:)

Hmm first this poem is giving me a strange chill for real I like your wording you made it actually DARK and I love that but I am not totally sure about the message I can't see it is from god maybe you are talking about misleading cause I don't thing God would smile at death as I interpreted the 2nd line as her death so maybe it is devil or maybe it is just the persona's mind playing her many possibilities and I don't know which one is the real meaning behind these simple words you wrote.
anyhow this is amazing poem you made me think a lot over a few words trying to solve the obscurity of the poem, for me this is a perfect dark poem

keep writing =)

Powerful words T. Short but leave a hard impact in the end.

This is a nice little haiku. Is it in the dark section because of the death? I'm not sure I see it as dark... I see it as the inevitable. Everyone dies. I think the reason God would smile is because he is gaining another child into Heaven, not that he is happy she passed... but that she is coming home.
I may be totally missing the point and meaning of this poem, though lol.

Anyway, great piece, Tony!

Great write!!
The message is so simple yet so deep.
I love the shifting of characters it automatically transmits images in my head.
Always a pleasure to read!
5.5 from me