Acoustic Beating

by ah satan 666   Oct 18, 2012


I hear the tapping of the rain on my window...
my mind drifting as each rain drop plays a tranquil note.
[ Click ]...
Now surrounded by darkness, its time to sleep.
Eye lids heavy and locked tight...
But my minds eye, has a different agenda.
The down pour on the rooftop picks up speed, as does the melody in my mind.
The drums are kicking in and I'm lost in our song.
As if morphine were oozing through my veins like venom,
to the root of my pain.
My minds eye frantically begins to search...
deep beyond my clouded thoughts.
To a sadness. An empty pain in my heart,
Where you once lived.
I wish I were numb.
Cracks that form from within the hole in my heart,
Racing like splinters through ice revealing the unsteady current below.
Every note in my mind projects an image of you...
An acoustic beating of the soul.
Thinking to myself as i sink in this abyss...

You where never the friend, you had always claimed to be.
Your twisted faith and dreams, destroyed the heart & soul of me!

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  • 12 years ago

    by silvertung69

    That is some deep emotion girl. he must of left you high an dry. sweet pain.

  • 12 years ago

    by MyHalozChokinMe

    The title is what caught my eye (I have this almost perverse "thing" for acoustics lol)

    The imagery in the first stanza was powerful enough to take me to that place where I could imagine the tapping rhythm of rain on the pane of glass...

    I also really like this line:
    "The down pour on the rooftop picks up speed, as does the melody in my mind."

    I could just picture the thoughts racing in your head, matching the pissing rain coming down...

    But THIS line is what kills me
    "As if morphine were oozing through my veins like venom,
    to the root of my pain."

    I can feel the rush straight through the veins (and to my heart.)

    This poem was descriptive, making it easy for me, as the reader, to imagine the heartache...

    And I love the comparision of the rainstorm, and the rush of thoughts in your mind to "An acoustic beating of the soul."

    This is the first poem of yours I've read, and it's the shiz.

    Just sayin. =)

    • 12 years ago

      by ah satan 666

      "The title is what caught my eye (I have this almost perverse "thing" for acoustics lol)"

      ^^.... Possibly the funniest sentence I've read in a while :D.... Maybe because I use the term "its my thing", so it amused me that its not just me... made me giggle a lot!

      I usually like the rain & thunderstorms, but I didn't that night!

      Thank you for your comment 'the shiz'... Also made me chuckle. :D

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    You know, this piece allowed me to hear the beating of rain drops.... Ive heard that repetitious sound many times before... when a relationship/friendship ends, the emptiness can be as heart breaking as the beating of rain... its an empty feeling and this piece is very powerful :-)

  • 12 years ago

    by Marvellous

    Where offence is found, Love is bound. Within every scar, healing dwells.

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