by A lonely soul Oct 18, 2012
category :
Life, society /
faith, religion
Centuries of bitterness |
by Amreen
This is so true. You said words which reflect truth and the ending is superb. |
by The Princess
This hit hard. I wonder at times however if it's really god's words or us? It seems we, humans, have always been talented so far in making up reasons to strike one another in order to prove our superiority. Had there been no religion I'm sure we would've found other motivators. |
Thank you Princess. Your suggestions were helpful and have been taken in consideration. |
So much truth expressed poetically here |
by Darren
I am going to join the 'liars' |
Personnaly I think saying "Poetically, I can't appreciate this as a poem", or "For those who lied to you and said it's a good poem; it's totally not", is not very helpful to you, and is kind of rude, and not true, not offence to them, I hope they don't take it the wrong way, but I liked the flow of these piece, I think you had good things to say, even though I am quite relgious and in that way I had to step back when I read this, I think your emotion is spelled out perfectly in the poem. I write long poems mostly and perferably, (for me), so I probably don't have mcuh right to say this, but personnaly I don't think the length of a poem matters as much as it's meaning, I tihnk you did wuite a good job, and have more talent then given credit for, I am really relgious, and the only thing I'd like to say is I felt like you were dissing the christian religion, I could be tired, it late here, but warn someone on the top if that' the case, over all I think you poured your emotions out well and did a great job, don't ever stop writing |