Wow I can't believe the message and the power and truth in this poem,,it's very well thought out and so much reality,,cuz really we're all equal no mater who we are or what believe. As I've heard and said "it's not religion it's our relationship with God."

5/5 very well done I loved it, great write

I have to say, I'm becoming a powerful fan of In your face poetry... the kind you have penned here, where it speaks of a powerful message that I am a firm believer on... many people justify indescribable acts in the name of "Lord" and it truly leaves me disgusted and speechless... thank you for sharing this piece... its mouth dropping!

U knw david, i hate this thing wen ppl try to prove dat thr religion is superior than others.
Ur piece is superb..

God is forgiveness and believing comes from the soul, nobody can force others to believe in anything.

Poetically, I can't appreciate this as a poem and I have few suggestions to make it flow a wee more easily. What do you think? PM me. :)

For those who lied to you and said it's a good poem; it's totally not.

Even though I disagree with what you're saying up there, at least, put your words in a more creative poem, that has some emotions.

It went flaaaat, from the beginning till end.
It's like I'm reading a 4 years old child paragraph, random and with no format.

My 2 cents of criticism.
I am used to read from you better pieces.

I loved his honesty and praised his comment for that.
Nobody is working with nobody, it's all in your head.

Now allow me to get my comment back, because you don't deserve it. Hit the delete button.

Man...

Personnaly I think saying "Poetically, I can't appreciate this as a poem", or "For those who lied to you and said it's a good poem; it's totally not", is not very helpful to you, and is kind of rude, and not true, not offence to them, I hope they don't take it the wrong way, but I liked the flow of these piece, I think you had good things to say, even though I am quite relgious and in that way I had to step back when I read this, I think your emotion is spelled out perfectly in the poem. I write long poems mostly and perferably, (for me), so I probably don't have mcuh right to say this, but personnaly I don't think the length of a poem matters as much as it's meaning, I tihnk you did wuite a good job, and have more talent then given credit for, I am really relgious, and the only thing I'd like to say is I felt like you were dissing the christian religion, I could be tired, it late here, but warn someone on the top if that' the case, over all I think you poured your emotions out well and did a great job, don't ever stop writing

I am going to join the 'liars'
I wrote a very similar poem a few weeks ago. yours deals in facts that cannot be ignored. i love the message and the debate it will invoke. That is what great poems should do. well done.

So much truth expressed poetically here

This hit hard. I wonder at times however if it's really god's words or us? It seems we, humans, have always been talented so far in making up reasons to strike one another in order to prove our superiority. Had there been no religion I'm sure we would've found other motivators.

As to the poem, what I liked most I guess was your tone. This was no dead write - for example, at the part of "so die, none believer!" I heard it being shout out. Not to mention, I value poems hat have are thought provoking and have message.

If I were to change a single thing I would in the 1st stanza make it "and holy texts" instead of "written in holy texts" and in the last stanza I would've removed the first line and went on saying "Reserve places..etc" but then again, that's the way I read it. Well done you.

This is so true. You said words which reflect truth and the ending is superb.
Wonderful message to share
Keep writing(: