Nothing On You (Diminished Hexaverse)

by Meme   Oct 18, 2012


And I still compare all
men to you; they always
fail when put next to you.
You standardized my heart
to only beat for ones
like you, but there is none.

I nurtured your love
in me for years. It
grew as we grew, but
no one saw how I
loved you in silence.

My tears broke the
disguise I wore
the day I knew
you cant be mine.

No need to
look any
further now,

there's no
one like

You!

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© Copyright 2012 by: gIrL
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Diminished Hexaverse-
An unrhymed poem in diminishing 6 stanzas, made up of a sixain, followed by quintet, followed by a quatrain, followed by a tercet followed by couplet and ending in a single stich.
Where L1-L6 6 syllables each, L7-L11 5 syllables each, L12-L15 4 syllables each, L16-L18 3 syllables each, L19-L20 2 syllables each and finally L21 1 syllable.

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  • 11 years ago

    by LoVerSLaND

    I loved this 5/5. Easily relateable

  • 12 years ago

    by Lost Dreamer

    "And I still compare all men to you; they always fail when put next to you."
    That's my favorite part explains exactlyy the way I feel, its crzyyyy!!
    Goodd poemm! Lovee itt! Could read it over and over again and neverr get sick of it. Great jobb :)

    - Mirandaaa

  • 12 years ago

    by tainted melody

    This is not an easy format of poetry to creatively write in, but you managed to write it beautifully. It sounded natural instead of sounding forced. good job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    This piece is heart-touching and so creative... Firstly, an excellent attempt for such a difficult pattern you used to paint your love and also a beautiful message shared. I like your pattern-poems as they show off your creativity and talent so well...Brilliant:)

    And I still compare all
    men to you; they always
    fail when put next to you.
    You standardized my heart
    to only beat for ones
    like you, but there is none.

    ^^

    The way you started this poem shows that you are still having the same notion about the guy you love when it comes to love and that it is difficult for you to place any guy with him to match your feelings for you....
    The standardized part is awesome!!

    I nurtured your love
    in me for years. It
    grew as we grew, but
    no one saw how I
    loved you in silence.

    ^^
    Truly, When we love someone secretly, our affection grows with every meet and sometimes they fail to see it in us and also we express our affection for them in their absence because we are shy to say them that we love them.

    My tears broke the
    disguise I wore
    the day I knew
    you cant be mine.

    ^^
    But when reality hurts, our veil of sadness gets off and we can't always hide our grief that our love can't be ours...Sad:((

    No need to
    look any
    further now,

    there's no
    one like

    You!

    ^^
    But still, your heart concludes with this, that when you still have someone to relate to, or love, that person is the immediate answer...

    Beautiful display of emotions...
    Great job:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Meme,
    I have never tried this type of form but you always manage to pull it off effortlessly, it flowed really well and nothing felt forced or out of place, the whole love thing was really mushy but I loved that and the emotions were really evident here.

    Such beauty and love in the whole piece...
    great write girl
    x

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