Comments : Hatred

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I despite <--- I think you meant despise :)

    This was such a sad write hun, what I liked about this actually was there was no structure, when usually I would look for structure in a poem, but sometimes vents turn into good poetry and I could tell this was a vent for you..if these are true feelings I want to touch on the fact that you said they reminded you of what you can't achieve. You need to rid that mindset and realize no one but yourself can stop your from achieving sweety.

    lovely write, keep writing it releases a lot of built up tension.

    • 12 years ago

      by Wafaa

      Omg i did mean despise:$ big mistake i'll fix it right away...

      About the non-existant structure of the poem, I felt I needed to let it all out even if it's just a bunch of emotions.. Because it truly hurts to remember i gave up once and I regret it deeply now.

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Good power in your words here, very honest and you have claimed your message well.

    This person has hurt you in a deep way, in a way you think you will never be able to get over. But the truth is the best way to get past this is to move on, be yourself and do what you want with your own life and prove them wrong. prove to them you can be who and what you want.

    Nice write

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    So well crafted and thoughtfully penned:)
    Message is expressed aptly.
    Excellent:)