Walking a blind path

Nice dude, there's still lights whenever there is darkness, hopes for the desperate...

This is a really beautiful, meaningful piece. I almost feel like this piece is about someone who only sees things that they're told to see, and follows someone they're supposed to follow, that they're maybe intimidated by? There's maybe a fear, but yet a desire to break away and stand alone and start making their own choices, or their own thoughts. Or this person kind of just sits on the sidelines like a wallflower, watching everyone. Just my thoughts.

It's a beautiful idea, the sun/moon thing. And keeping "The moon will rise alone." as a line of it's own, it gives it more depth and meaning, I feel. That was really smart.

There's some punctuation mistakes that need fixed. They comma in the second stanza needs to have a space after it for the word "maybe" and the word "see's" needs the apostrophe removed.

Other than that, lovely piece.

I just realized you had asked me to read this a few days ago, sorry that it took me this long =/

When I read this, I feel a sense of a wistful sigh, a thought, coming from someone that is always looking in from the outside or perhaps, always in the shadow of someone else.

As usual, it is really just one line that really grabs me.

"The moon will rise alone."

Good write Tony...

Wow, I would like to know how you got this idea in your head. It could perhaps be a random thought that could very well be true, it is very thought provoking. Or it could be representing something else within yourself and this is how you have used the words to express it.

either way it make s a brilliant poem and holds a great image.

The moon only see's through the eyes of
^sees

for with out the light it would be blind
^without

Or would it find its own path among the suns

^sun's

The moon will rise alone.
^ I love this line :)

This is short but inspiring, thought-provoking piece.

:)