Where do you get your greatness from girl? I swear, I sit here and read your poetry and in every line I can see something I relate to, I can feel the emotion, I can hear your voice and I get so immersed in your lines, it is amazing and frightening at the same time.

This sort of eerie grin manifests on my face
when I think of how we use to lay awake
listening to acoustics, writing acrostics,
like two narcotics on a romantic drug.

^^How do you find your words? The metaphors and the way you write is just breathtaking, and I am so god damn jealous...I wish my poetry wasn't so raw, I wish I had your talent.

I will allow myself to say this once,
because truthfully since you've gone
my tongue has turned to silk and
all that slips out of my mouth are
malign speeches of your exit,
but I miss you.

^^I love how you mixed the metaphors here with simple lines and saying's, it just adds to your god damn brilliance!!!

I have yet to find your replacement.
I don't have the strength to
because I find that I'm
sleepless after midnight,
dieting on air,
breathing inconsistently.

^^I love that expression "dieting on air", to me, I feel like I could speak those words because we need air to breath but we don't want it to consume us, sometimes too much air is suffocating, like life

but I was blindsided.

^^"Blindsided" should be "blind sided", two words

You are a hypocrite and before your
eyes go red and you spout of at the mouth,
listen to me- because I'm right.
You allowed yourself to
stay guarded,
take precautions,
be wary of me.

^^^It's the strength in you that I get drawn to, I love it, the way you take no prisoners, everything is just honest and as you please...awesome

I can't give you anything more, I'm shot girl, you just get me every time

love you
x

"since you've gone
my tongue has turned to silk and
all that slips out of my mouth are
malign speeches of your exit,
but I miss you."

stop it foknoggets... stop it. :@

What the? That first verse is like the opening of a tongue twister, very very creative words put together there Chels I loved it.

I love the idea of this poem where the addiction is relating to a relationship and how what can seem the perfect addiction can turn into someone just stopping it, with no affects. It is sad because we questioin their love from the beginning and how deep it truly was if they can, as you put it " go cold turkey".

The ending is almost like a dare, like you are daring them to come back to their habit and get hooked back in.

Another strong poem of pain, but worded well as always.

Wow... I love this poem... it's so perfectly written.

First, the title caught my eye. I was curious to read this poem and find out what it's about. Then when I read this... I was so intrigued.

"we use to lay awake
listening to acoustics, writing acrostics,
like two narcotics on a romantic drug."

^ I love this part... it felt sweet and romantic, as the two of you would write poems together at night... but then later it was clear that it was about a friend.

The imagery you created throughout this poem was so lovely to read and envision... I liked such parts:
"I'm
sleepless after midnight,
dieting on air,
breathing inconsistently."

It is evident that this poem holds a dear part of your heart, and it feels like a true story. I know what it's like to lose a friend and it really sucks :( to feel defenceless and unable to rectify the friendship is a hard feeling... but when another person gives up on you and decides you're not worthy of their friendship, then it's time to realize he/she is not worthy of your friendship. Stay strong hon! <3

Great poem!!! Love it!

Thanks for sharing this very openly emotional poem. What makes this piece very real is your feelings of pain that you have penned.

I honestly think everything in this poem works except for the reference to cold turkey. It's written so strongly with such an excellent repertoire of vocabulary, and cold turkey seems to antiquated and colloquial. Otherwise, I liked this a lot.

I liked this poem a great deal. The flow was great the description was almost flawless. What a refreshing read great work if you get a chance check out I Never Knew take care plot121