From Ireland with love

Of course, of all things, a love poem. Bleh. I make it known that I'm not a fan of love poems, so there's my disclaimer. :p

This was sweet though. The only thing I know about this kind of ring is that there's a television show on American TV called Sister Wives, and they all have Claddagh rings. They're polygamists.

The commas all need spaces after them. Other than that, this is a sweet poem. There's not a lot of poems based around a ring. Engagement, sure. But not rings. So that makes this one pretty unique and creative as well.

"I will always be there, forever your protector."

That line stood out to me the most. EVERY girl wants to hear that and believe it. We tend to throw all we are into relationships, and to know that someone will say something like that to us, makes us feel wanted, safe, protected.

Good one!

I did not expect that the story of this poems would end up as convincing and heartwarming to someone...you did great!

Now that my friend is beautiful!!

brought back a few memories, i have this ring :)

5/5

Really interesting how you took this ring and really wove this beautiful and emotional piece. I truly enjoyed reading it, it was filled with light and joy :)

"The sun shines behind me, I see the rays
dancing across her gracious skin, I pull out
a ring, the silence is deafening."

Again, I like how you used deafening, even though sometimes I feel, well I guess I really don't know, it can be overused, and you used it in your other latest poem, it still gets the point across. My favorite line here that made me smile was: "I see the rays dancing across her gracious skin," that was just inspirational!!! Her "gracious skin", what true beauty is being shared here.

"This ring was given to me from my mother
two hands clasping a heart surmounted
by a crown,I say to her-"

I love your wording here, and how you incorporate the dialogue, it's neat, fresh, and really brings on a feeling of warmth and unity.

"The hands,it represents friendship that
I will always be there forever your protector".

Add a comma after "there"?

" the crown shows that I will always be loyal ,
you are the only princess in my kingdom".

I liked the second line here, I thought it was unique. I mean other people can say "you are my princess", but you wrote "you are the only princess in my kingdom", that just made it all the more meaningful, and that you are meant to be together, it's destiny.

"Finally I give you my heart, my everlasting
love, I promises that I will love you till
our soul no longer exists".

"promises" should be "promise". And should "soul" be plural or did you mean you have a unified soul so it IS just "our soul". Beautiful meaning here, it flows so naturally yet is written with such determination.

"The moment engulfs me I let out a single
tear, we share a kiss while the ring slowly
falls on to her finger."

Comma after "me"? Loved "engulfs" here.... really shows special bond of moment.

"The heart points towards her trembling
fingertips as a sign of engagement
I can't wait to turn it around and
become her king."

Punctuation after "engagement" would be my suggestion.
A moving poem as others said, keep writing, it's wonderful!

"Finally I give you my heart, my everlasting
love, I promises that I will love you till
our soul no longer exists".

- promise*

I would add in one suggestion, Because this poem is so beautiful and upliftingly romantic.

The moment engulfs me I let out a single
tear, we share a kiss while the ring slowly
falls on to her finger.

- I would change the word falls to slides, because I would imagine you gently placing it onto her fingers rather than it falling. This is just my opinion though.

What a beautiful story here, so tingly and warming to read and just a beautiful scene to imagine. Well done