Serenity

A lovely story, this just shows how beautiful the love you have is. It is very relaxing and carefree and it kind of says between the lines that you will get through it all and just enjoy each day because you both deserve to and what better gift than to share it with each other.

Misty eyes collaborate
in unison with hushing,
thoughts, careless details
of a sleepless night
for two..

^^^^^

Beautiful opening here...I loved the thought of speaking with your eyes because, when you are really in love with someone...words are not necessary...also loved... a sleepless night for two.

Rebelling against
time, our
determination
to live daily
as lovers
is a quest
we proudly
partake,
^^^^
This tells me that you live for each other and encourage happiness back when the other is feeling a little low.

sipping wine,
mixing giggles
as satisfaction
mates with
an eternal
flame...
^^^^
Such a nice cosy picture of togetherness you hvae painted in my mind here.

We stare in silence
as the candle
slowly smolders
into the darkness....

I love watching candles burn...very hypnotic.
My eyes keep jumping to the word smolders here because I spell it smoulders but I know this may be phontic?

Anyway, as usual..thoroughly enjoyed it!

I absolutely love this piece...it was so beautiful and told the story of a relationship strong enough to stand through time and life...

Misty eyes collaborate
in unison with hushing,

^^^ I think of misty eyes when someone's crying and hear I sense both parties seeing as you put 'collaborate' in there and them trying to console one another...

thoughts, careless details
of a sleepless night
for two..

^^^I love how you worded this...and 'sleepless night for two', that is awesome...two lovers lying awake in the dead of night...

Rebelling against
time, our
determination
to live daily
as lovers
is a quest
we proudly
partake,

^^^ time is precious, there isnt enough of it to do what we want...and this part spoke of love and respect for the other half...and how it is a struggle but you would do anything and everything...lovely

sipping wine,
mixing giggles
as satisfaction
mates with
an eternal
flame...

^^^ I can picture you laughing :)

We stare in silence
as the candle
slowly smolders
into the darkness....

^^^Thats a sadder image...I dont know if the candle was meant to symbolise the end of time...or the new day or something....?

I love this piece...but I always love your writes.
I apologise now for the fact that its 3.40am here and this probably makes no sense...

xxxxxx