Im so glad your poem won the challenge, I really loved it:)
Congrats again

I have stumbled upon this piece.....looks great

before I try and dig for a deeper meaning I am off for a cigarette,.............................................................................................
Okay I have returned

poems written are from your subconcious, what are you really trying to say?

I am going to break this down and tell how this reads to me, I am probably going to stumble so far off track that I will be lost in my own mind, but here goes

stanza 1
You begin with twisted, a great word with many meanings, as it is a dark poem I will take the dark meaning, it is warped, unforgiving, spiky, then the use of 'etch' suggests cutting into something, leather suggests a skin laced with red ties into twisted thoughts of cutting yourself.

stanza 2
you use the word again that links us nicely to the previous stanza, we have a hint that your mind is not quite all there. It suggests the book is full of ramblings, I am imagining sketches that look demonic, writings that tear the ares out of life.

stanza 3
Jesus springs to mind, yet you describe him as mortal, as I pray to an egg I see him as mortal. (something I dreamt up to argue with the believers) The mention of stars is clever, something beautiful that is out of reach.

stanza 4
The wretched are the sheep, the lost souls, the followers, it is like you are 'lilleth' feeding on the worshippers who blindly follow a faith.

stanza 5
a noahs ark reference, thrown in a bit of vampire references, this is my favourite part of this poem.

stanza 6
You could be suggesting that to the worshippers and blind followers your ramblings seem mad, but they are clear to you, you see things from a different plain altogether, you see the bigger picture.

stanza 7
Aha!! vampires, you have to hide your true self, you cannot co exist with mortal men, this ties nicely back to stanza 3

stanza 8
the diary of the dead, a witch reference, must be a halloween challenge!!

I love the layout, the strength of your word choice and the atmosphere of this piece

interesting how the rhyme scheme changes half way through.

great write Andrea

Darren thank you so much for your detailed overview of my piece... I actually wrote this two weeks ago for a Halloween challenge in our group.. We had to take a title of a non horror film and turn it into a horror poem... the challenge results were posted today... I wanted to do something different with the rhyme scheme and flip it around a bit... thank you for noticing :-) always enjoy your comments... :-)

Congrats on your win =)

I have to say, I was a bit surprised when I found out this was your poem, I think the curse word is what threw me off?

"I'm the author of the notebook, a romantic b itch"

Seriously that line was so damn sarcastic that I laughed!

Ha ha ha Cara thats awesome! Actually I really loved that last line... but in order for me to post it in dark horror I had to change that B word to Glitch instead... otherwise I would have had to post it in Explicit... but I did mean it to portray sarcasm... ha ha ha glad you enjoyed!! thank you

How quick you gave me this in the challenge was like you knew straight away what you was gonna do

After Darren's comment there is not much to say lol

It was awesome

:)

Mapleeee I loved this! Scary yet awesome at the same time! :) definitely a 5!

Loved this entry for the comp Maple and your idea was again very creative and powerful. It is such a well known film too and the contrast you have written about is so very oppostie of the film itself.

I loved the rhyming of this too, made the flow very steady and I enjoyed the read. Well done.