A halloween story...

by Amreen   Oct 31, 2012


Mili was on her way home
with Ted- her favorite teddy
in her hand,
she had her way through the forest
reaching home from granny's.

It was an October evening,
the sky was painted orange
by the setting sun,
making the forest ambiance
dark as black.

She was singing her way
when she heard a gruesome melody
echoing from among the trees,
she got the sight of an eerie owl
who was accompanying her tunes.

Mili got terrified hence,
chills went down her spine
and as she moved ahead,
she reached a scary hut
with jack-o-lanterns hanging all around it.

Wanting to know who resides there,
she stepped in
and a breeze of fear welcomed her,
signalling demonic aura.
Oh! What was waiting for poor Mili!

Inside were curtains of spider webs
exuding dust of terror with each step,
she tripped over a black cat
and cried out of fright
And got up from her sleep.

Drenched with fear, she slowly realized
it was just a nightmare....
heaving a sigh of relief,
she looked at Ted and hugged him tight
and then.... Ted hugged her back...

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  • 11 years ago

    by Marcy Lewis

    I love these types of poems. This is like your MO. If someone put ten poems in front of me, I could point you out. The use of people specified is rare in poetry, and you do it often. It's so intriguing.

    Drenched with fear, she slowly realized
    it was just a nightmare....
    heaving a sigh of relief,
    she looked at Ted and hugged him tight
    and then.... Ted hugged her back...

    ^I didn't expect that. This is so incredible. How was this piece not further recognized. All of a sudden, the piece wakes up from this incredibly dark moment that you think is something from a suspense/horror novel. You are fabulous at imagery.

  • 11 years ago

    by Areeba

    Omg!! It was such an awesome poem *_*
    left me stunned x_x

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I could just insert my comment I wrote when I judged this, but I decided to give you another comment instead... This poem was really fun and unique... what really got me was your ending... the teddy hugging you back made me feel warmth, and comfort but it also took me on another twist of the teddy being alive... giggles... oh this piece was just awesome!

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Nice one ami.
    Details(breeze of fear, jack o lantern, demonic aura, eerie owl, curtains of spider web) r gud fr dis haloween piece.
    I loved dat part whr u said
    'she got the sight of an eerie owl
    who was accompanying her tunes'.

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Great story you crafted here. I like "Mili" - it's a name that shows innocence, especially how you used the image of a teddy bear; both of them together are actually very potent. Its shortness almost made it seem like a nickname as well, and nicknames are endearing.

    "Oh! What was waiting for poor Mili!"

    I liked the use of interjection; made it poetic in a way. The second exclamation point, though, I thought would be better as a question mark.

    "signalling demonic aura."

    This read a bit awkward to me. Perhaps an article would do?

    Overall, I really liked the images you've presented; tbe transition of events are very much dynamic. And I enjoyed the ending.