Comments : Bittersweet Summer

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Chance took me by quick surprise

    ^I think this line needs an "a" right after "by"

    Chance took me by a quick surprise.

    Nicely done, love hurts, it seems. Rather deception? This piece had a good flow so I thought that it might had a syllable count. however, it is free style so it took me by surprised.

    Well done.