I Am Vain

I like the feeling of silence here. no dialogue, just a stern person willing to deal with these torments in silence simply because no one is there to offer assistance. while i am taking it a little literally, i think this does a good job of alluding to how stoic a lot of people who actually need help will be, because they dont necessarily want to thrust their problems on others for whatever reason. enjoyed reading this very much.

Woo hoo. my nomination button has returned . so i have nominated this.

Great piece again, nice to see it posted to your account ; - )

This deserves a closer look

I love how each line contradicts each other,

7 double lines, starting with double 1

'I rove through bleak alleys' gives off a real sense of senselessness , bleak suggests no destination, no future, alleys are tight drab places, you must feel like the world is closing in around you,

part 2
Love the suggestion in this, there is a blade in reach, you are leaving it to the reader to make their own mind up, the fact you know there is a blade, and it is 'in reach' rather than 'on the side' or 'in the drawer' suggests to me that this character does.

part 3
interesting word choice 'unaided' you wouldn't normally associate this with miserable normally someone who is alone unless being alone has made you miserable.

part 4
This is my favourite part, really strong imagery with 'holes in the wall' you can picture somebody punching holes to release stress or anger,

part 5
This works very well, not only do you have anxieties but they control you, such a good use of words here.

part 6
Suicidal thoughts punish those peoples minds daily, hourly at every potential opportunity, so 'punishing' is a great word choice.

part 7
really sad ending and shows a depressive chain of thought that links well with the rest of the poem.

I love how every second line is almost an understatement for its preceding line.

great poem and worthy to post to your account.

If I had a nomination button, I would nominate because this is that good.

Good piece LW... I liked the acclaimations...
:)