Comments : Melody of the Broken

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I feel like all womens chant should be "'ll sing my song, he can choke on cigarettes!" Hahahah no all seriousness, i hate this feeling and you know it :/

    Sad thing is the guy never really realizes it...we get some half hearted apology and the silent treatment....I just think those men have it coming. They'll fall in love one day and get playyyedd the way they played us.

    This is an incredibly worded poem..when you can turn a sad situation into beauty, you know you're a beast at writing!

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I write to connect and I express what I too experienced in my day... <3 you

    I like being called a "Beast" it makes me feel like a giant redwood tree! WHOOT!

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    You always manage to make your poems feel like they are meant for everyone...and there is always some peacefulness and reference to nature and life and it's beautiful, it always is...

    I love this, and it is something we all can relate to, your love is greater than the love of any guy I ever met :)

    Beautiful

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    There are songs for the damaged,
    women flock like birds to sing
    the tune of a broken heart.

    -aww, what a sad image, a flock of birds tweeting a sad song to represent all the womens pain. A broken heart does sing the most heart breaking songs.

    Melody begins
    levitation of sorrow,
    exposing the hidden.

    - I like that you can express the idea of music letting go what is being hidden inside, just letting the music carry it out through tune.

    Dancing angels prance
    in the meadow alley,
    hushing fears
    snuffing away
    the life of a burning
    cigarette, that
    smolders in the lungs
    of a man who
    dared to bring
    them down.

    - It is sadly so true that this happens oh so often and way too much. And we always suffer more because we tend to be more sensitive to the pain and feelings.

    Your poem is full of sadness for all women, but then it endds with a bit more hope that these guys can keep trying but in the end they will not bring us down. xx