Can you remind me where Ive read this? Did your write it for a contest the was held recently ?

I just love this poem, as if you're talking about a God ? like the creator..

the 1st stanza reflects helplessness like you dont have control over your fate, just like in cheess, a hand moves the soldiers etc..

the 2nd stanza shows that even what's within is is written ? like we cant escape our fate, when you say "everyone we ever
love is determined by one invisible force"

your 3rd stanza reflects your inner will like you dont want to be controlled, you want to be the one who controls your fate, and you said it in a very direct way, and the wording : free me from chains..shows how stuck you feel and the demanding tone shows how badly you need to be freed.

I may be reading this in a diff way, but in all I loved it, I found it special in itws own way and also found it personal and many could relate to.

well done

Ok Tony...I see you baby, shakin' that a**!!

This was epic!! Quick question though, the "he" being described here is God right? That's what I got anyways..if so all the "he's and hims" should be capitalized...if not disregard this. :)

Anywho....I've always loved the use of a puppet master in poetry it portrays so much...however I can't say I've seen it used like this... where its not really about a controlling relationship, but about God determining things in your life...

Awesome awesome write :)

Tony, Tony, Tony,
I can really see how you have grown as a writer, your work has taken on a whole new level over the last year.

In this piece, I see the scene from three points of view and that is unique, as Nana said...it is special and many can relate to the feeling of control...being controlled.

Hats off to you on another write :)
x

Very powerful, so many people will relate to this, I sense you feel like you destiny is pre determined. There is not much you can do and you feel like you do not have control over your life.

I am not sure if you are having a pop at God, if so welcome to my side of the fence.

love the last line really sums up the whole piece.

A few days ago, I was thinking the exact same thing wondering about destiny and the way we are controlled. I think you did a great job showing how much you want to master your fate and not be a puppet in the hands of greater power... very beautifully written!

well done!

I really like this poem... I was intrigued by the title, as that alludes to someone controlling us. I was surprised to see it was about God.. for some reason I didn't expect that.

I like the reference to board game in the first stanza, it just made me think of the games people play with our lives, and how that is completely unfair.

I like the mention of the strings being cut at the end, it was a nice touch to being freed by the puppet master.

Great job :)

I've seen the puppet master used in poetry, but this is totally on a new level. Using it as a metaphor of God determining your life... very unique.

Whoa, what a strange way to write about God and predestination. Like every move is involuntary. It's almost like you're blaming God for every little thing that you do - whether the outcome is good, or the outcome is bad, God decided it and your actions were not your own.

Even though he is all-knowing, we do still have free-will ;) The choices are yours, baby!

"my strings are cut, as I prepare to fall before
the puppet master."

this sounds like you're anticipating His wrath, and destruction to follow. Which is a creative way to think about it. Really, a good write.