I can't comment deeply on this one, and I apologise firstly for that, secondly I reach out and hug you, for while I do not know you all too well and am not sure whether this is a fictional poem or something deeper, I can feel an emotion and a pain in the words, the simplicity of the wording makes this poem stand out, it packs a punch into the heart and leaves me with a deep sadness for you, whether fictional or not.

Awesome piece either way,
<3 x

Saffie.....your writes just get more awesome and powerful with each, just outstanding, such a sad piece and i agree with Tara it just make us wanna hug you!!

Your awesome saffie truly a great poetess.

Xx

See wht you do :p double post :/
Xx

Saffie this is my all time favorite of your
I fell in love with it , from the first line ,
This was such a deep poem the end stanzas
Was perfect

Her lips sealed tight with an
invisible glue which was forced
on them so many years ago.

This was my fav I got such a vivid
Image from this

Nomination and added to my faves

A masterpiece

( I can't nominated) :(

Saffie, my love, I just want to say that while I understand your feelings of disconnect, your soul and spirit have more life than most.

This entire piece touches me, as always, I feel like I am sitting right next to you.

"Black tears trickle down
with the pain of the past and the
aftermath of what's still to come"

I've lived this exact torture for a long time.
This stanza hurts me, and speaks wisdom that I
wish you didn't carry.

"Declined access to the future
and rejected by the present,
leaves her lost inside her past"

This is so true. The silent hell that you write of
keeps us from moving forward, we can't find a way
to step out of this realm and exist in the present.

I see you Saff-
And my hand is always here for yours.
<3

Ooooooh ya you go girl, this is soo powerful, and filled with emotion.
The first two stanzas OMG are amazing, your description and the use of metaphor, made the feelings come a live, as of its waving, hey Im here, and you can see me. There's a huge amount of sadness hidden behind this poem, and there are lots of things, that can be the reason for this poem to be written..

Reallu great job Saffie,
wish you the very best:)

I'm not going to break this poem down, this is too powerful and deep. It's simply amazing and heartbreaking at the same time. I see you grow as a writer each time I read a new piece of yours.

I do want to highlight a few lines that are my favorites -
"Her lips sealed tight with an
invisible glue which was forced
on them so many years ago."

I love the mention of invisible glue. Sometimes we feel like we must stay silent, like our lips are actually glued together, so true.

"Silence screams suicide,
but only the reflection in her mirror
will see this through her lifeless eyes. "

The alliteration here is wonderful. Silence does scream suicide for SO many, it's heartbreaking.

<3

Loved it . soo deep . love the metaphors. really good :) soo sad. loved the line silence screams suicide.

Wow..saffie..wat a poem..
Evry stanza is so meaningful..
Brilliant.

Wow this one is so sad... whay a powerful poem you wrote here.

The first stanza is great. You bring to life a person in a dark room or slightly lighted room just enough to see her own pain in the mirror. Eyes really do show so much emotion they really can scream in a way to see hurt. I love how you describe her tears as black because black can go with any dark emotion there is like anger or sadness. I think that is very clever to put it in. Lol. I love yhe metaphor! . You can cry for anything that you want to. But again I love the connection between the tears and the past and whats to come. If your has been horrible then I can see the connection there!. And whats to come is nothing.

I love the lips sealed tight part. As she is maybe mute or she was sworn to stay silent from someone harmful in her past. Very creative there. Yes so many years ago so you open up her past a lil bit to tell me that something happened but its vague! I love the word play of pas, present and future. She sees her future as hopeless and thats why she is so sad. The present is just as hopeless because maybe she lost everyone she loves or just built up a fear of rejection. The present also tells me that maybe she blames herself for what is happening. But being stuck in the past is difficult. There are so many things that can haunt you. I've beenthere and still going through it. You did a great job here of portraying a character that ccould be based on reality.

The silence does scream sometimes more then words or a voice could ever do. When you are alone with your thoughts the silence is the last place you want to be. Her heart is a fireeork in the sky. Meaning her heart could be full of anger as she is with her though or very scared w hich is more likely!. Silence is an unforgiving mistress all of the time and I love how it scream suicide. And omg! The mirror at the end I love because she is the only one that can save herself but it might be too late. I love this just wowwww 5/5

Sad poem really good though this girl wants to speak but nobody hear's her or want's to hear so she don't try but she just want's to feel apart of something i like how you use the mirror only there you can truely see yourself sad yet good p&l midnight sky

Oh my I really want to cry and I'm not one to be made to cry so easily trust me only the mention of suicide will do it and this is a great piece hun 5/5

-Bet

"Her lips sealed tight with an invisible glue" - love that line. And the last stanza is incredibly moving. Loved this poem, as lots of others obviously have!

Tonight the silence screams,,,,,,this is so wonderful