Comments : For good.

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Kenzie, This poem may be short but it does pack a punch of emotion, and not only that but the simplicity actually works really well.

    If I could just give you a couple of pointers, try and tidy up the punctuation and remember to capitalise the needed words, such as "I", it just makes the poem look better to the eye and helps the flow.
    Also "burry" should be "bury" with just one "r".

    Otherwise, I see potential in you, in short pieces like this

    x

    • 12 years ago

      by kenzie

      Thankx! (:
      i try my best, i love the feed back!
      it really means alot, ill make those corrections now........(: