Comments : This Is The End

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    Amazing... I am lost in your words... You are superb with this thought.... I have read all your poems I think, which talk about this guy... you create magic with every word...
    Wonderful!!!

    • 12 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    Amidst the chaos of words
    and metaphors, somewhere
    in between the lines of rhymes
    and non-rhymes
    - I found you ..

    --

    ^^^^

    This is a great opener because it leaves the reader wondering...who is she talking to....my opinion...you're talking to yourself?

    And with that pen of yours
    I was lost; not to be found,
    sometimes in a lyrical melody
    other times in a rebellious sea
    of emotions. But never was I
    able to easily escape the world
    you create with words.

    ^^^

    If I'm on the right track and you are questioning yourself then you have done a great job with this stanza...only thing I would check is the word *create* because everything else in in past tense here?

    Remember when I once read
    my name somewhere in your
    library of thoughts? You called
    me your poetess; your inspiration.
    Nestled in the tenderness of your
    words; I felt like I was finally home.

    ^^^

    I love the use of 'library of thoughts' but I stumbled over the word Ã"nce "...me with my accent perhaps but..it didn't seem necessary?

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    My poet, this may be the last
    time my lines carry your name,
    the last time my poetry speaks
    to you. I don't know if it's in fact
    you that I am leaving behind, or it's
    the writer in me. But until we meet
    again, until I learn how to hold that
    pen again; just remember...

    *in fact* ? should this be one word...infact? honestly..I'm not sure so ask someone else about this please?

    Really enjoyed this...your poetry is becoming more enjoyable the more I read it...keep it up!!!