Being too nice often comes with a price

The first line really hit home with me because I totally can relate to it, being too nice does often come with a price and usually it isn't a good outcome, so many people walk all over nice people and take them for whatever they can get.. It's truly sad.

In which the payment is too complicated to suffice

As you explain here, the payment is too complicated because there is so much hurt and abuse which comes out of being nice and lending your heart and love out to others you are often left alone beaten, battered, and abused..

A price often bringing hatred, betrayal and sorrow
A price buried in the debris of pain echoing across the hearts marrow.

Love the way you explained it here, the price.. Going into such vivid detail of what you have experienced through being too nice. And bravo, marrow isn't a word used much, I dig it!

Being too nice only embeds the emotions into the tight plait of complication,
thoughts eternally twisting and turning in the mind with haste and poisonous desolation.

It does get to a certain point, or well what I took from this part is being nice gets to a certain point where you just get fed up of everything and everyone, even the ones who are using you. It gets old and it hurts, you end up not knowing who to trust all because you were too nice. I

I really liked "thoughts eternally twisting and turning in the mind with haste and poisonous desolation."

Spending countless hours of the day having your thoughts twisted and poisoned you just feel totally empty, alone and in misery. Trying to do something kind and having a horrible result out of it so not right.

Being too nice is the open door way to the vulnerable soul
allowing anyone to enter and dominate with incompassionate control.

RELATE!!! 100% RELATE!!! I have allowed this to happen to me so many times, I am trying to finally take a stand and be true to myself, sometimes you've got to be not so nice to people to find your own happiness.

Being too nice, was once a valuable trait to possess
But now a terrorizing cancer spreading and destroying the ambitions one must confess.

Being too nice is a valuable trait Andrew, it's a beautiful quality to have and it's something not to let go of. But knowing when to take a step back and take a stand is the tough part, you can do it I believe in you. Don't ever let go of your compassion, the world needs nice compassionate and loving people now more than ever.

Awesome read, keep that chin up bra. :p
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Sooo true. when ever someone is nice they get stepped on. i like how you portrayed that in the poem. very emotional and deep.i like how you showed that some people tried to be nice but they got hurt while doing it so they quit. overall 5\5

Very true and i like your emotional lines
keep writing my friend..

I completely agree with you MM... Being nice is like being a double edged sword which is dangerous in all aspects and people just take us for granted.... I loved the way you conveyed this feeling..... Superb!!!

I love the message here, and the honesty of it, sometimes nicety becomes a trait that is overly used, to capture and confine, and sometimes there is the too nice when you don't deserve it, or sympathetic too nice.

I wasn't overly crazy on the long words, especially at the ends of the lines, a bit too wordy for me, but that's just my opinion, and at times the flow was a bit shaky with them and the rhymes...

but the message and the creativity here was pretty awesome... nonetheless
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Great message here...it seems like the people who are nice seem to get stepped on and used. I think there should be a boundary of being nice and too nice...once you go to the too nice, you are pretty much setting yourself up to get hurt.

I like the rhymes and the word usage, however I thought at times they were a bit too much. Overall, I liked it.

Very true, I think a lot of people can relate to this! Being nice often leads to being walked on- it makes you vulnerable and people often see it as meaning that they can do whatever they want and get away with it. Nice people often have to put up with the pain of being taken for granted- this poem shows this well. I agree with Hannah and Tara that this poem can be a bit wordy- however I think your vocabulary usage is quite nice, if only you could find a more concise way of getting the message across?

Lovely poem though :)