by Maple Tree
I just read this breathtaking piece and I need to go for now, but I will return with a proper comment sweets :-) |
It seems you reach far. Try bringing it down to one attempt at first before you do a string. |
OK, you're going with the first one. However, you are actually telling the reader your experience rather than letting them discover it: "the old winding roads leading to and penetrating forests, the peaks and the caves of the green mountain leave unforgettable memories in their minds" and "forests entice minds." |
by Mohan
I think you done very well in this challenge |
Your prose is developing well. You still need a change up that compels a new perspective from the reader. Perhaps if you restate the nature reserve as being unexpected - an oasis in the uplands or something like that. Also try to reduce the wordiness. |
by Amreen
Beautiful... So serene... I loved it:) |