Comments : The Sun

  • 12 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Wow.
    I'm kinda speechless right now.
    The personification of the sun is amazing.

    First stanza: You miss that person, the love, the relationship, everything... you even miss the actual heartbreak because it was something to feel, something besides being completely numb.

    Second: It's been years since you seen this person, but now they are trying to rekindle the relationship. You are not sure if it's a good or bad idea to go down that road again.

    Third: That person lit up your world again, but yet you weren't the only persons world they were lighting? Maybe cheating?

    Fourth: The wall you once built after they broke your heart the first time...is now crumbling again by her addictive light.

    Fifth: You are happy again, the sun radiates with love for you again. I love the line "Your words, they graced my heart and spoke in a language unknown, 'I love you.' " really nice touch. Your final wall is now in pieces, you have no barriers to keep her out any longer.

    Sixth: So, I think I was right by interpreting that she cheated. You are furious, as you should be. I think a fight arose... but maybe you didn't win hence the broken arm, etc. Or... I'm not really sure? I'm not great at interpreting poems haha. At least I try, I suppose.

    Seventh: The sun realized she only wanted you, she would deny any other darkness that came her way.

    Eighth: However, the other guy returned...the jealousy took over and you got mad.. and you soon realized that she loved to see two men fighting over her. I know a lot of girls like that :/ ... they like the attention.

    Ninth: So, a fight happened.. you got hurt... but it doesn't compare to the pain you feel inside your chest. You looked for her rays... but yet were nonexistent...but you waited... and when she did rise... she only has joy that you fought for her, that you hurt for her..

    Last line is perfect. Great ending.

    Like I said, I'm totally no expert on interpreting the meaning behind a poem. I'm probably totally off..lol. I did enjoy the poem and thought it deserved somewhat of a comment and of course a 5. :)

    • 12 years ago

      by Blood of a Lion

      *claps loudly* Congratulations on the longest comment I have ever recieved. Thank you :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Let It Be

    Dont expect a long comment from me but i really do love it the emotion draws me in to the point i can feel almost as you felt at the time of writting it. It truly is amazing like you! XD

  • 11 years ago

    by Blood of a Lion

    Thank ye kindly :P