The pictures you drew in this poem are amazing. This piece is so refreshing, I love it:)

Unfortunately out of votes:/
Great job.

First out I must say that the imagery here is so well incorporated, and the scene is such a delicate one.

If I could suggest a few things, nothing major, just that the flow in the first stanza was awesome, I felt the second lacked a little and not for the wording but the layout and punctuation was a bit messy.

I have cleaned it up a little and without demeaning this piece I hope its okay...that I did that

The flowers gently kiss every colour of the rainbow goodbye,
they disconnect,
raising the black velvet curtain
the moon illuminates an abandoned waterfall,
where the stars reflection forms,
your forgotten portrait.

Makes it easier on the eye, and I still love this piece :)

I loved reading this nature poem of yours, Tony! While I don't read nature poems too often, I liked how unique this was, describing this scene and how fresh it really was.

The title was softly beautiful....I would love to see some waterfalls in real life, I think they'd be gorgeous, but using that word "reflective" makes it so peaceful, thoughtful.

"the sun crawls towards a welcoming moon."
- this line was wonderfully personified....I can imagine the sun taking its time to arrive with that moon.

"The flowers gently kiss every colour of the rainbow goodbye,"
- I really enjoy all your personifications!! This WAS gentle and precisely-worded in a way that held such beauty.

Lovely use of words to create this image, and this feeling of unity. I felt serenity here. And then, near the end I also am left with melancholy memories- like how you mentioned "your forgotten portrait", it's like the stars reflected this past, but this face that still shines.

My only suggestion would be to make add apostrophes where they need to be, like how stars should be ---> stars'

Really neat write :)

Wow, what a completely new image you have given me, normally I get quite dark and sad images from your words but this was beautiful. I am glad you chose to write this one.

The scene it sets in the beginning of a beautiful summers day beginning to end as the moon is returning to the sky, this is so peaceful and a delight to imagine.

I love the midnight sky being related to as the black velvet curtain, this was very powerful.
A beautiful day and then ending with a beautiful night.

Love this one

The images of nature are so beautiful that has made you forget about that someoen. That's nice, great piece.

I enjoyed the scene.

Short but I find this piece--creatively done. I loved how the title fitted well with the poem. Loved how your imagination seemed to come out with ease these days, Tony. I like the twist in the end, totally unexpected but very clever!

Dude, very cool write ..im a fan of your nature pieces, your imagery is freakin awesome....i really like the tempo of the write though, it has a kinda fluidity to it that i always think is so important in a nature poem

I also like how you structured it, the fist part with the day and sun then the moon and that velvet curtain...and then the last two lines throws a curveball with the addition of a loved one.

Great write fella!

As a Wiccan this line " the sun crawls towards a welcoming moon" stood out in particular to me so much. Such a passionate piece made me dream. Lovely!

Again, your language is stellar.

You paint a serene picture for me...

I like the way the birds' melodies fade as the moon comes out...

But especially love the abandoned waterfall being illuminated by the stars, triggering the memory of a forgotten face...

You're evolving Tony, and I like what I'm reading..

=)

Wow, this is amazing... ive grown really fond of nature pieces lately.
fantastic imagery and word usage! :)
love 'the sun crawls towards a welcoming moon' so beautiful

Wow, what a beautiful poem! I was so mesmerized from start to finish. I really loved the imagery you created. It was so lovely.

I must say my favorite part was:

"The flowers gently kiss every colour of the rainbow goodbye,"

Beautiful poem!! Love it <3

You've painted a pretty picture with your words Tony... I can smell the freshly cut grass and feel that warm breeze on my skin, I see day leaving as night sets in, the waterfall looks so pretty with the moon above it, I can hear the water flowing... yet here in the end I feel sad because of the forgotten one... this is the way a poem should be, causing all these feelings (seeing it, feeling it, smelling it, hearing it) for the reader... I love it Tony... well done!!

The first stanza is fantastic you set such a tranquil scene here,

So much imagery throughout, nice to see a nature poem as detailed as this.

another excellent write from you Tony.

Your imagery is amazing, very realistic but with an essence of fantasy. Great poem!