Blue Velvet Ribbon

by ArtistrySoul   Nov 23, 2012


11 months ago
It was tattooed in the palm of god's hands,
One girl, You
One boy, Me
Faith forever inside god's plans
E=mc*squared, dilemma of Einstein's hair

. . . . Fountain of flourishing BEAUTY,
when you slow dance pirouette

Distance apart,
surrendered from land and sea
In a state, unknown?
A best friend
A genuine girl
A beautiful face
Amazingly cute, no make-up

. . . . Sparkling rays of cinnamon aroma,
glimmered by just being YOU

Effortless so, thoughtful and sincere
time sleeps,
people stare, beyond belief
Who else cares to understand you?
They don't realise what I see,
a white rose with personality

. . . . Her orchestrated HEART,
whispers symphony's and the world applauds

You and I
Simple as Pi, 3.1415
An uncut diamond in the sky
Bright stars,
Night's pale moonlight

I plant a tree, on top of a hill
Our hiding place,
Our friendship tree
Don't be scared, in the storm and rain
Never will you sit alone,
beside a cold heartache and pain

. . . . Heaven has a plan for a girl like you,
Because of the way I considerably CARE for you

I yet to discover,
Her voice?
(For me ) A gift,
Cross bowed with a Blue Velvet Ribbon

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For a very special girl, you always are =b !3 !3

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  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    "You and I
    Simple as Pi, 3.1415
    An uncut diamond in the sky"

    I thought the first two lines were very cute and I LOVE that last line. You've really captured the essence of your heart in this poem and I think its so sweet and tender!

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I really liked this, it was so different and original from alot of poems that I've seen on here in a very long time.

    ". . . . Fountain of flourishing BEAUTY,
    when you slow dance pirouette"

    ^^This was so easily one of my favourite parts, the imagery you paint here allows me to create such stunning images in my mind and leaves me smiling.

    I was thrown slightly as some parts had a rhyme scheme whereas others didn't, however that didn't make the poem any less enjoyable for me.

    I interpretated this as a poem about an online friendship and it truly moved me, as I too have a friend in the states on another site that I talk to often and you capture how magical and amazing such friendships can be even if you never or rarely meet in person.

    I enjoyed this very much.

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Can I have a guess who she is?:P lol

    Anyways thus was really different(in a good way)
    I love how you wrote it, it flowed really well. Great job^_^

  • 11 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Awww this is such a sweet and heartfelt poem! I really enjoyed it from start to finish. I like the referral to Einstein's E=mc squared and Pie... it made it seem as though love is as simple as calculating mathematics, and when you find the one you want that is the right solution.

    I also liked the structure, and the parts where there were periods and then a sentence.. it gave the poem a nice touch. I also like to play around with such structures and punctuation at times.

    The ending was rather surprising... Because from the entire poem it felt like this is a person you knew and saw often, but when we find out that you have yet to discover her voice, it appears to be about a girl you know online. I think this is such a sweet dedication, and whoever this poem is for, is lucky to have someone like you.

    Beautiful poem! :)

    • 11 years ago

      by ArtistrySoul

      Thank you! so much for your warm comments =)

      I am really graceful to receive comments like these for this poem, and she did very much adore the poem very much.

      You are tantalising my smile with your words, highly appreciated <3

  • 11 years ago

    by ArtistrySoul

    Thanks very much Yakori!!! :)

    And Yes!! she was really really delighted with the poem and it made her day, so smiles all around.

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