I'm gonna have to nominate this , if I was 40 this would of made me smile , I like how I get I'm 40 but I feel 20 feeling makes me think your very young hearted love this

Bloody phone lol

I love this Andrea, its always good to feel young at heart and I love your spirit, its free, and I love that about you, I also love your poetry and I am running out of things to say,

You always pen masterpieces and leave me speechless.

I'll try and get back to this and leave a better comment, :)

mwah
x

This is such a beautiful love story. It is clear you are someone who is young at heart (as well as your partner) which is a beautiful thing to see in itself. They do say, you're only as old as you feel and it's obvious from this you're still young in life.

The title of this piece was simple yet so beautiful that it drew my eye instantly. It's a lovely and very poetic way of naming snow.

The descriptions again were kept light and simple which I think reflected the mood perfectly as well as the spirit of the two characters who frolicked in the 'snowflake rain'. The descriptions weren't overwhelming but added a certain depth to the piece and allowed the reader to be witness to these lovers.

I'm not sure whether the structure plays a significant role here, but I feel that it has a certain wisdom in its creation. I'm not sure why. It's as though it should be a shape, but me having little knowledge of snow items and such am unsure of its shape if that be the case. Though, perhaps this simply was what felt right when you began writing this piece, which is also perfectly fine.

One minor suggestion, and please ignore if you feel I am overstepping the boundaries here: I think the line:

'in the days of young' may sound better written as 'in the days of youth'. I also feel that with the word 'young' used three lines later, it makes the poem appear slightly cluttered in a way.

Just something to perhaps consider; maybe you already have before posting, I don't know.

Overall,
this poem is a beautiful, beautiful write. May your love story continue for many more years to come in such youthful fashion. (:

Five/Five

Thank You Alisha, Tara and Tony for your lovely comments and helpful tips :-)

Your poems are like a soft melody so alluring, which play around me.... I have no words left for you... You are amazing.... And Im lucky to know and read your poems...
Excellent:)

You were a soft spring

that spoke to me,

while my ivory snow

cap dangled in the breeze.

- this to me represents someone who has come along at the exact moment when we feel like giving up. someone who came along with their love and honesty and fromt hat moment you knew they would make everything ok and bright again.

The eternal sun brought us

days of spirited laughter,

mittens were soaked

in the days of youth

even though our forty

year old bodies danced,

we were as young as

a nightingales first

song.

- what a beautiful thought, the nightingales first song, such a unique sound and beautiful wording for your poem. This shows how even though you maybe met later in life, your hearts were once again that young age that fell in love and forever remained youthful together. You have both been through this journey and feel it has kept you young at heart.

We love in the nights

of warm shadows

and snowflake rain,

tamed, middle aged souls

wrapped in the warmth

of youthful hearts....

- what I love most here is warm shadows, usually this is depressing or scary or dark but in this case you have even made the shadows beautiful and inserted it into such a loving poem.

I know this poem is from your heart and so I think it makes it more special knwoing that even through the hard times, you can read this poem and remind you of the good times and the love which is the most important thing. <3

Youth is not in the outside, I mean in the skin but how one feels. A 20 year old may be feel not young despite being so. Yet a 80 year old can feel like a 15, is a matter of feeling that makes us young. And I'm so glad that that feeling of youth is felt within this piece.

Simply bueatiful