Even If

Wow, this was bewildering, unimaginable, scraming out emotion I felt pour into me from the words, fantastic work, one of my favorite of yours I think, great job, you never disappoint

I agree with all the comments made above, this poem is very emotional in the style it's written. I also like your technique and approach for rhyming throughout this piece.

Great poem.

Great work! Nice rhyming and meter.

What I liked most about this piece is that you made these rhymes your own, taking in a different structure/scheme to have the first two lines, then the 3rd and 6th, and the fourth and fifth rhyme together. Great portrayals, with the "even if" serving as hope that will happen with time. That's wisdom here: life does go on.

Third stanza, fourth line: "your" should be "you're".
Reading this two times, I was surprised at how you incorporated a deeper feeling into fewer words. Though you don't go into great detail about how your heart aches, you leave it open for the reader to wonder. This alone was beautiful:

"So my heart won't allow
Me to catch your gaze"

I don't think I've heard anything like that before....it's like the heart is trying to understand that your love is gone. I could tell this came straight from your heart, and I could feel that strength showing through here.

Emotions....emotions....emotions...throughout the poem! Lol
The rhyme is good so is the poem itself!!!
5/5