I make my works really, really hard to comment on. A prize to the first person who can.

I can comment however, I need more reads to fully grasp the content. At first read, i thought someone broke your dreams and that someone took your place. Or rather not yiu but the one who is narrating this piece.

I wish I could nominate this. Ran out of votes, sorry!
It's epic. I'd be pretty upset too if someone plagiarises something like this.

When I first read the title, I immediately thought of the Greek goddess. But I realised it's probably a coincidence when I began reading it.
I love how you've captured my attention completely. The bits of Old English are really well-executed. It seemed natural and flowed so well for me, though, I'm not entirely sure if those you's:
e.g., "No, that's just you,"
and your's:
e.g., "forever and deep somber molding of your heir swine."
and other words were intentionally not written in Old English, while others are. I think it would be better if it were consistent.

Really enjoyed this, nonetheless. Keep it up. :)