Your Heart Of Stone !!!

The message is loud and clear in this piece, you are writing of a broken heart and one has a heart of stone.. Its actually a beautiful piece... however, the confusing part is not in the message, but in the way its displayed.. captiolizing each word is a bit "loud" when reading... and there are a few spelling errors which snaggs the flow... On this site, we all try to help when we can, I too have been known to try different formats for the creative aspect of a poem and Im happy when the readers let me know its a bit confusing... also, when I have typo... I do like it when people let me know...

the poem is beautiful... Here is a suggestion for format, its just a suggestion, just trying to help:

Our love used to run wild and free,
but I no longer have you beside me.

Remember those days we spent alone,
you held me like you loved me
before our hearts
turned to stone !!

So when you start missing me
like I miss you
remember our hearts
once were true.

Remember them Like
I have done,
for now you have none
and I have one !!

The poem message is very clear... the person with a heart of stone is all alone and now you have a love that treats your heart with love and respect... this is how I took the message... its all in format and how you display the poem as well as the message... Hope I helped some... its a beautiful piece!

are=our

Lol sorry i do agree it's a nice poem BUT hard to read and look at my first comment sweeite and you will see i did say it's a nice poem

Queen Ash

Thank You At Least Some One Agrees !!

Wow, this is a very wonderful poe, great job

Sorry sweeite...

Queen Ash