Over Analyzing

Wow! I can actually feel what you feel just through your words :)

Wow! I can actually feel what you feel just through your words :)

I wrote you a love letter on a
napkin then cleaned the floor
with it. I presume you're like the
rest, enjoy crushing my feelings
on a surface you can walk on.

as if they weren't broken already...
as if they weren't choppy enough...

- excellent opening, like you wrote the words but in your mind thought they would be wasted anyway so you took the control over it and wasted them yourself. It shows here that you have been hurt badly before and presume the rest to follow will only hurt you in the same way. The fact you are still healing from this hurt and so the last thing you need is for the feelings to be damaged even more.

Truth is, you have no idea what
I wish to say to you and if ever
given the chance, I'd stumble like
chained ankles of a prisoner who
lives behind bars of acceptance.

because no one has taken me for who I am...
because everyone has tried molding me into who I'm not...

- the chained ankles ! wow chels, this is so vivid I can hear the chains clanking, representing the stuttering and hesitation in your voice if this oppertunity was to arise. I like your added thoughts here, that you feel you cannot be who are because everyone else tries to change you into something else. This is somsehting wel all face going through life and struggle with and you have worded it so well in a way we can all clearly understand.

I apologize in advance for not telling
you that on my worst day, in my
saddest hour, I see the color of your eyes
in this ink and I can't help but to stare .

like I've never seen them before...
like they are a non invented color...

- The eyes are such a powerful thing and to use the ink here to portray them is very strongly done. I can feel you being drawn into them.

I'm too coward to tell you this.
I'm too nervous of your response.
I'm too ashamed of falling so quickly.
I'm worried you might be like the rest.

This is what I get for over analyzing.
Wasted words and a clean floor
for only me to dance on.

- your ending is so deeply touching, to know that this is what you want, to show them how you feel, but your emotions and insecurities won't let you open up enough to let them in so instead you are left alone with only your thoughts and these poetic words for company.

Such a sad but beautifully written poem Chels chels.

Ladies, ladies, wow! Your comments mean so much to me I really appreciate you all taking your time and giving me awesome feedback!!! love all you dear ones!

Let me just say I think you've definitely improved since I last read a piece from you. I love the style you've been using, it really makes everything flow nicely.

I can truly understand your emotions here, we all over analyze certain situations and most of the time it's good to do so, but usually only to a certain extent. Over analyzing love can make or break everything but I feel like as you said you've been hurt before and you've had some try to shape and mold you into someone you're not. It's great to be cautious to prevent more hurt. We've all been in your position several times. I know when I was over analyzing love, I eventually let it all go and gained so much happiness as a result. Very easy to relate to! Nice job :)