Comments : Ocean Writer

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Wooow really heart felt piece. I love the metaphor you used.
    GREAT poem^___^

  • 11 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    I saw alot of love in this ? Maybe I read it wrong

    You know what I love about your pieces are the originality but also , they never are the same not
    One bit ,

    Your talent is a class of your own

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Thank you Tony and Wild Flower :-)

    This is a love for a writer's writing... its my poetic take on how I feel when reading poetry, where it takes me.. I wanted to create a different angle on the emotion of reading.. if that makes sense.. ha ha

    thank you both :-)

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    You always take me on a journey when you write and I feel that you go on a journey yourself through beauty and emotion. The difference between one piece and another is worlds apart yet still true to you.
    Love this and love you

    xx

  • 11 years ago

    by ddavidd

    Amazing Piece !! I few times used night as ink of my poetry, in my poetry. but I never posted those works. than how can I accuse you of plagiarizing. I think we plagiarize from the inspiration.
    pleas do not us coffee as the ink... because it is going to hurt.
    some other memorable metaphor. like darkness that units with your light (like yin and yang) seeing the unity in the universe instead of separation.
    I could go on but stop here before they call me weird!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    This poem mesmerized me and I simply fell in love with it. The title is unforgettable and the images made my jaw drop. The second stanza is so beautiful and I caught myself immersed in your darkness/light metaphor, thinking about the power of love in our lives. Everybody wants to be connected "far beyond rational" like two complementary forces. Every woman dreams about a Yin-Yang love. After all, duality is a permanent condition in life to form a whole: one can't exist without the other: female and male, water and fire, darkness and light, earth and air, etc. It is also fantastic that the nature of Yin Yang flows and changes all the time. When one aspect increases, the other decreases. Balance can be only achieved if things are not static: "inhale, exhale".
    And what to say about the last stanza? ...It hypnotized me my dear! It is delicate, beautiful, perfect.

    !all I know is, he moves me,
    the ocean writer I ache to
    cross, in sea of emotion,

    I'll drown until the ink runs dry...."

    "the ocean writer I ache to cross, in sea of emotion" is one of the best lines I have ever read in my whole life and I want to bow to you because you made my heart skip a beat. I was speechless before such a poetic gem. Those lines will always linger in my soul. All I hope is that your ink never "runs dry" because poets like you have this strange power of making us drown in a "sea of emotion". Excellent piece!

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueJay

    The title intruged me and was well thought of so that's a great skill, not that you need to e told so though. And It is well written. I like the creativity in this piece a lot. I also really like the tone. Nice write.