Comments : Gaia's Suspicions

  • 12 years ago

    by Thomas

    Amazing write! How you describe the relationship between people and earth is so cool.

    We take nature for granted too often and we dont even realise it.

    Awesome job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Reaper

    Very beautiful Hannah I love the way the words were dancing in my head haha don't stop Hannah :)

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    This was really something, I seriously like the take on in this piece.

    I like that how you wrote this from the perspective of mother nature. You gave concise examples and each of those examples showed contradictions. The last line makes me worry. Because everytime the child say that he loves something about nature, he/she goes and proves otherwise. :-s

    So towards the end ... It's a sad piece.
    The child may say "I love you" but destroying it.

    Sigh, I like the tone of the poem and the take.

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Breathtaking, Hannah.

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    My child, you say you love my rain -
    you praise the pitter-patter that soothes your slumber,
    yet you will not wade into the depths of my famished heart.

    - what an interesting view inside a poem. It reminds me of how much I complain about the rain but yet when i am walking in it I love it, and when I hear it tapping on my window.

    My child, you say you love my sun -
    you glorify the rays that caress your dainty figure,
    yet when I raise my temperature to please your everlasting needs,
    you bail on me for a man-made breeze.

    - This is like when people complain about the sun not being out and then when it does come out they complain it is too hot and put a fan on. I begin to wonder here though if there is more to this poem than the thoughts of mother nature, if infact this poem is a metaphor for somone's insecurities.

    My child, you say you love my wind -
    you worship the gusts that twirl wildflowers perfume,
    yet when my current misplaces your freshly curled locks,
    you close your window, abandoning me -
    once again.

    - The sense of abandonment here implies to me it could be related to a human still. Like perhaps the rain is your sadness, the sun is your laughter, the wind could be your anger or your bad habits etc. All of which someone could accept but then later they have changed their minds and disliked them after all, leaving you abandoned.

    My child, I'm petrified of your claims -
    for one day,
    you may say you love me, too.

    - Over all this poem was very much worded in a nature way and describes the seasons and their ups and down which we love and hate. But in my mind it is deeper between the lines and is about scared of accepting someone's love and promises incase they too walk away from what they once said they liked.

    Beautiful poem. xx

  • 12 years ago

    by Hellon

    There is so much I love about this verse...from the title (very clever) to the different elements you speak of...it's just BEAUTIFUL!

    Sadly, we all take so much that mother earth offers us for granted instead of simply enjoying and being grateful for what we have. Each element has a purpose and yet we tend to moan about so many of them.

    Very enjoyable read!

  • 12 years ago

    by Amreen

    Awesommmmmmme.... This is one of my favorites from you:)
    Gosh!! So true. And the ending line is excellent. You are penning masterpieces hun.
    Keep writing(:

  • 12 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    This was beautifully worded, I see the speaker as God
    This was a really amazing idea , Wickid poem

    :)