Comments : MY BELOVED MOON

  • 12 years ago

    by yogi73

    Ode to the Moon! This is really nice. Good flow and I like the emotion.

    Some minor gramatical things:
    My garden of flowers "seizes" to bloom - should be "ceases"

    And everyday, I seek "thou" divine light for embrace - I think "thine" or "thy" would be more appropriate.

    otherwise well done!

    • 12 years ago

      by Joarz

      Thank you Yogi73. Most appreciated. I already rectified the words you pointed out. Thank you.