I love how you used 28 throughout the whole poem... 28 pills, 28 gulps of water, 28 minutes. It works wonderfully.

So, the persona wants to commit suicide by ODing, wanting to stop the painful feelings. Very sad :(

You used great imagery and had excellent word usage.

This is a really sad poem, the repetition of twenty eight made your tone sadder, which made the poem powerful. :)

The thought of committing suicide comes after something bad happening to someone. I hope all is good with you, and I hope this poem is just an idea that popped to your mind

Great imagery to describe a suicide attempt.

I hope this was not based on personal experience because suicide is never a solution.
A great saying goes like this: "Everything is ok in the end, if it's not ok then it's not the end."

Very well written piece.

You took the dark side of ending a life... and created a beautiful piece.. the light and creativity of this piece is breathtaking..

Saffie- you have the ability to share your darkness and thoughts and wrap them into a poem, so that reader, who may be lost in darkness, can relate... and that is touching another soul through poetry.. and its a beautiful thing..

making the reader feel they are not alone.. I'm proud of you and this is one reason why I say breathtaking...

Sorrowful piece mixed with darkness. This is unique. I loved the repetition of the number 28 in many faces throughout the poem. Great work.

Sorrowful piece mixed with darkness. This is unique. I loved the repetition of the number 28 in many faces throughout the poem. Great work.