That Bend In The Road

First stanza: What a beautiful opening. You are watching from afar, letting the beautiful colors soak in and be mesmerized by them. One of those moments that just make you speechless.

Second stanza: You were weakened by this person...you couldn't fathom up enough strength or maybe courage to walk that extra mile to them...so you left that part of you on the cold pavement. The addition of "cold pavement" speaks volumes... that the relationship has turned frigid.

Third: I love the line "I once was a stop in your reality" ...half of me likes this stanza and half of me is like eh, i'm not sure I totally understand it. It's just me though, not you...I just need to read it a few more times to fully understand, lol.

Fourth: Lovely ending, however very sad. If that person ever travels that road again, you hope they will stumble over that piece you left behind... to show them that you were there, that you cared, that you loved with all you had.

Once again Meme, you rocked it and have another wonderful piece added to your collection. :)

Ok.. After reading all the comments above, I saw a lot of clarity of thoughts in the revised piece and applauds to you to take them sportingly and incorporate them into your piece. Awesome! Now about the piece, I agree with Tara that the mention of the word 'a piece of me' seems unique and also it makes me think whether what is that piece of you, a memory or a part of your life, a special thing which associates an event. So you get why it is unique lol:)
I am mesmerized by the beauty in your words and the story narration you give here. It seems much like an after-event you describe and how you put up a flashback for events associated with the 'a piece of me'. I am spell bound with your metaphors and the volumes of emotions they share with just a mention. I am thankful I stumbled upon your poem once and now Im a frequent reader of your inspirational writes:)

Today I got to see the
colors of your sunset
and I was, for a little
while, standing a few
miles away from you.

^^

As usual, a beautiful start and when nature is a start, its an up thing for me. I visualized a serene scene here but you had something sad to share of it. A different view to what we find beautiful. as this sunset had a touch of sadness for you. Brilliant imagination here.

But I couldn't walk the
mile, so I left you a piece
of me instead. It's right
there lying on the cold
pavement.

^^

The critical part. The piece thing, it isnt confusing at all but gives the reader a diversity in thoughts for the piece you left behind. And that it is cold, lying on the pavement at the side of the person's life and awaiting his presence.

I never expected you to
understand, still I wanted
you to know that I am real,
that I once was a stop in
your reality. But my heart
kept contemplating on
whether or not you ever
existed!

^^

Very saddening. I hate this phase. Its so saddening when someone just never understands you and still you have hope to live with the myth.

So if you ever came across
that road, let your heart be
your guide to where I was
standing sometime before,
maybe then you will see the
piece of me that I left behind.

^^

Yes, when people will stop using their brains in matters of heart will they realise that they have missed a lot in their lives. And by then that road you encountered them has left long behind. Isnt it?
Sad but true!

Enticing write
Keep writing(:

Il hopefully be back for a better comment later on. You steal my heart always Meme(:

Meme...there was something about this poem that was haunting when I read it because....you focused on the imagery and left the reader to ponder what was going and and why you never walked that mile....I liked that so much!

Tara has given you some suggestions which I think you have taken on board. You both seemed to struggle on one stanza so...may I go over that with you?

I always expected you to
never understand, still I
wanted you to know that
I am real, that I once was
a stop in your reality. But
my heart kept contemplating
on whether or not you have
ever existed!

I think it's the first part that isn't quite right? Maybe...I never expected you to understand would make it flow better..just a thought. also I think you could drop the word have further down....it's not really needed.

Just something for you to consider. I did enjoy reading this one!

Much better sweets...hope my comment wasn't too negative, it really is a good piece
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