Love your word usage in this piece Tony... "sable" and cascading... are deep and rich words, first stanza is truly a great start to this piece..

Im left twisted with the meaning... fourth stanza is very powerful... innocent give of thier lives while the guilty delight in pleaure of purly being evil...

In my mind I'm thinking of a solider, left to fight, or those trying to fight for peace, are left to die for sins of another...

very thought provoking piece Tony... LOVE IT!

This is a new angle for you... and sultry in darkness and rich in word display... You rock!!

So this is the piece you were working on:)
This poem is so powerful, really enjoyed reading ot, awesome job:)

My interpretation of this is that a soldier is fighting for his corrupted country, he is having to watch his own country take the lives of innocent people. He is praying to God for forgiveness for the evil things he has seen but cannot do anything about it.

I love your word usage, they are very in depth and helps paint the picture.

Tony...it seems.to me that this piece touches a subject close to you as it is very raw and deep and the darkness drew me in from the start.
I fall on the conclusion that this is about a political war, sent from government orders.

The subtleness works well with the wording...yet the dark is evident.

You are a talent.

Very powerful. I agree with Hannah Lizette, in my view, at least.. it seems like its from a soldier's perspective, or something of the sort. Though it seems to be the darkness of life, in general. Innocents die, and the guilty ones seem to "enjoy life" longer, which is what the 4th stanza sort of made me think. Loved the words.

-Liz

Wow! This poem is dark and deep... and I enjoyed every part of it.

I like how you're upfront about political corruption, and how innocent people are being killed daily and there's not much being done about that.

"How can blood of innocents paint
dusty streets,while the guilty
dance upon His children's graves."

^ this stanza really affected me!

Beautiful ending... so touching. Well done

Powerful message. We always need forgiveness but guilt eats our insides and always reminds us we can't be forgiven. Loved your piece.Much enjoyed!

Interesting take,
You are talking to God, saying why are evil alive while innocent die? Let evil burn in hell.. But I don't understand the implement a life for a life... Part.

Good Lost me at the beginning my own fault i drifted but when i came back i understood. Deep but true.

I always enjoy reading your writes Tony, so very intense. Keep 'em coming (:

So, I've read this a few times...
to see if what I get out of this poem would change...

These recent writes of yours are different from what I am used to reading from you, the tone and depth, I mean. (Not that there is anything wrong with your previous poems lol.) I guess I was just taking my time and making sure that I was confident in how I personally understand what you're writing...

To me, it seems that while you live your life, day to day, you struggle with the atrocities in the world around you...

watching the innocents suffer...while the guilty roam free, with no consequence...

The "life for a life" maybe is your way of saying...an eye for an eye...those who are evil and commit evil, should be dealt with accordingly...
being banished to Hell...where they belong...

I could be way off. lol.

Good pen though :)

Absolutely agree with the message. There are people who commit such horrible acts of crime and get no punishment and often the victims are more punished with their pain than the ones who commited the crime.

I loved your language use and the tone of the poem, It is like you are talking to yourself but wanting others to hear these thoughts and agree that this is wrong.

Very clear message and I think this poem is one of your best. Loved it. I also want to point out that I like your title choice for it, because fate is something you believe in or not, and as much as we want to sometimes it can be hard when bad things happen and we wonder what the rules are, what people deserve and why good people suffer while the guilty run free.

Excellent poem. x

Loved your opening question, it started this poem off so strong and thought provoking with just one line..

Forgive me Father,for my
insubordination is instigated
by political corruption

^ This was epic, love your wording here!!

How can blood of innocents paint
dusty streets,while the guilty
dance upon His children's graves

^ I can already tell you the answer to this...its because of evil..those who believe in God usually question this, ask where he is, yadda yadda...however, if you believe in God (good), then you should believe in the devil (bad)...guilty acts are run by him, not God...sad that people choose evil over righteousness if you ask me

Tony, this piece was seriouslyy awesome! So dark, so thought provoking as I stated above, the wording was excellent. I really enjoyed this!

Wow. This is very dark. I never realized that dark poetry was a big signature of yours, and you're fabulous at it.

"How can blood of innocents paint
dusty streets, while the guilty
dance upon His children's graves."

I was cringing at this point. Like, I put my head in my hands and paused for a second before I could finish this poem. You have a way of disturbing me to the very core with some of the things you write, and that's fantastic. It's almost taboo, and I applaud you.

you've scarred me ;) LOL. Definitely one of my favorites from you, mate. :)