Ok so I loved this and the idea you took of it, very creative and clever.

Each part is described so clearly and then you own the body part that you have described. I like the added extra's in brackets, messages to this oother person, very strong impact.

My favourite was ( here you play ) with your heart, like it is a toy that can't be broken and so is played with in any way they wish too.

Sad words, but very strong poem. xx