Sarah, this was beautiful, it had that gentleness and elegance for a nature piece but also brought forth sadness and emotion that was really expressive,

If I may just point out a few things that I noticed,
There is no need for the capitalisation of the first letters in each line, as they aren't always new sentences and it draws the eye towards that...
also, the last line doesn't flow into the piece with poem, maybe having a look at that and trying to reword it slightly differently...
maybe "she shall be" instead of "shall she be"

but I love this piece and it was really beautiful to read.

Good job
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