Good metaphor, similes and wording in the second stanza. I'm surprised why they don't rate this poem until now. It's really loveable piece.

I loved this! This was beautiful. I loved all of the description of the brain melting. It's a shocking image yet the way you portray it... So normal and calmly. It's brilliant c: great job!
I actually chuckled at the inclusion of the bystander effect. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but was still great. I felt hopeless after I figured that no one would help the speaker.
This was beautiful! C:
-z

Man this is crazy..I like the introduction of body parts here and how it had this gory dark feel when reading it...very nice wording!

Love the ending...leaving it up to us to remember what?? We will never know, have to figure it out for ourself.

Nice write doll!

I don't know why I haven't seen this until now, but I am pleased that my attention was drawn to it, because I love the descriptions, and how the wording was smooth throughout...
It's strange as I want to say that this was beautiful, yet it was dark and creepy in places, it had an elegance to it, and that is unusual, to read something on this level with that touch that makes it unique and powerful.

I love the use of the "bystander", I absolutely love this word, its so poetic and mysterious, and how the ending didn't come to an abrupt halt, it just ended in a way that made me think and I didn't want it to be answered, I like that it's just left with our own thoughts...

Rusheena, I really admire this piece in so many ways, it is really well penned and creative...great write

xxx